my daughter is studying seniors and applying to under graduate college. We gave it first shot in the academic experience of last two years topic. this has 250 words limit. This is in general english, but we want this to be written professionally, reword and rewrite but the flavor of the story should not be changed. i gave some bullet points but this needs to elaborated as well. Thank you so much for your help.
Queston that we need to answer: What has been your best academic experience in the last two years, and what made it so good?
our answer: I just wrote it half baked. request you to add below and elaborate. this is 250 words limit.

After completing my sophomore year in India, I came back to the USA permanently to join my parents and continue my education in the USA. America is a land of opportunities, rich in culture with people from multiple backgrounds and diverse cultures. Language is a vital part of human connection. Language allows us to share our ideas, thoughts, and feelings with others. It has the power to build societies.
My first experience with language was spanish Spanish is the second most widely spoken language after English in 43 American states and the District of Columbia. The Hispanic and Latino population in the US is the second fastest-growing ethnic group in the United States after Asian Americans. Since 19% of the Hispanics can speak only Spanish there are areas where English, excluded from peoples lives.
As part of my future ambition to become a doctor, I felt that learning second most spoken language in the USA as the best language to learn. Hence, I selected Spanish as my second language in both my juniors and seniors and got A+ grades. this shows my interest towards learning new language which helps me to communicate better with other people.
best acamdemic experience as i am proud of learning new langugage
-my score excellent
was able to interact with spanish people and in shops, in working locations with other workers
my ability to express and interact with people has been improved and i was able to make new friends
-this will help me in my future career and the days ahead in the future