It’s a persuasive essay on “Is loving your job important ?”. I wrote the essay already and received comments from my teacher on it, that have to be followed very precisely for correction. In the introduction he wants an introduction that has a “hook”, then a topic introduction that adds information to the topic, related to the hook, then a transition into the thesis, and then the thesis statement. For the paragraphs, there’s gonna be 3 paragraphs of 3 supporting ideas each. he wants a topic sentence in the beginning of the paragraph, then a supporting idea, then a transition to the second supporting idea, then a transition, then a third supporting idea, then at the end of the paragraph, a conclusion that restates the 3 supporting ideas relating them to the topic sentence. And this process needs to be done 3x (for each paragraph). Then he wants a counter argument. I wrote 2 counter arguments and I think that’s ok, he wants us to explain the counter argument fully (to let the reader know that we know what we’re talking about) and then destroying the counter argument to prove our point (without using the supporting ideas used in the argument bodies). In one of the counter arguments I used a method he wants us to use which is called “devil’s advice” and it’s to be a sarcastic and give the reader terrible advice so that he realizes that his idea is not a good. And in the conclusion, he wants us to restate the theisis statement in a different way+Restate the main supporting ideas ( tell them in different words ) and then a closure that uses pathos (to make the reader want to follow your advice : in this case to find a job that makes you happy). So I followed the steps, but now I received his comments that need to be followed precisely, if a supporting idea needs to be removed to write another one that still makes sense with the topic sentence then feel free to do that as long as it’s not contradicting other supporting ideas or as long as the information is not used in other supporting ideas. I also had to use techniques (that are in colors, or underlined etc, that shouldn’t be modified as he didn’t ask to change them). Also he doesn’t want us to use research or numbers (just one time but i did it already) so it should be inductive and deductive processes to state the ideas. The essay is in the third person (I used you sometimes but it can’t be used more, except if it’s very important). As he commented, some ideas need to be changed completely changed into something else. Make sure to only change what the comments ask please. And nothing should sound like it comes from research but just written the same style I wrote the rest of the essay. I will upload the document with his comments on it already, and another document where I took notes in the class of what he wants, in case the information I provided is not clear enough.